Well done with your proposal Alex. Your logline is excellent! Your synopsis is good, you have shown that you can effectively communicate your idea, I did get a little confused as I got the sense it was set inside the creature with all the bones but then Marco sees an eye so it might be worth having another think about how you can make this clearer. Your moodboards show a thorough understanding of the idea generation phase, it you really want to take your moodboards to the next level you could think about including more images from related films rather than having the majority of them as art. You have effectively communicated why this project should be made one thing you could include more of is related media to show just how popular Sci-Fi films are at the moment. You have fluently communicated why you are the person that should make this project and clearly understand the importance of being interested in the project. You have a competent understanding of how to create a target audience profile next time try to include sections like related content, hobbies, and culture. You have effectively communicated who you target audience is however, I do feel your age range is more 12-21 rather than 16-25. You have communicated fluently what your requirements are for this project. I couldn’t see a schedule or any storyboards/concept art in your proposal make sure you are including everything that is required. Throughout your proposal there are a few missing capitals so make sure your read through to double check your SPAG before submitting work. Your blog is well labelled and the theme of your proposal is suitable for your film so good job! Overall your good job, make sure you include those extra bits and then you could push to get a higher grade!
Well done with your proposal Alex. Your logline is excellent! Your synopsis is good, you have shown that you can effectively communicate your idea, I did get a little confused as I got the sense it was set inside the creature with all the bones but then Marco sees an eye so it might be worth having another think about how you can make this clearer. Your moodboards show a thorough understanding of the idea generation phase, it you really want to take your moodboards to the next level you could think about including more images from related films rather than having the majority of them as art. You have effectively communicated why this project should be made one thing you could include more of is related media to show just how popular Sci-Fi films are at the moment. You have fluently communicated why you are the person that should make this project and clearly understand the importance of being interested in the project. You have a competent understanding of how to create a target audience profile next time try to include sections like related content, hobbies, and culture. You have effectively communicated who you target audience is however, I do feel your age range is more 12-21 rather than 16-25. You have communicated fluently what your requirements are for this project. I couldn’t see a schedule or any storyboards/concept art in your proposal make sure you are including everything that is required. Throughout your proposal there are a few missing capitals so make sure your read through to double check your SPAG before submitting work. Your blog is well labelled and the theme of your proposal is suitable for your film so good job! Overall your good job, make sure you include those extra bits and then you could push to get a higher grade!
Well done with your proposal Alex. Your logline is excellent! Your synopsis is good, you have shown that you can effectively communicate your idea, I did get a little confused as I got the sense it was set inside the creature with all the bones but then Marco sees an eye so it might be worth having another think about how you can make this clearer. Your moodboards show a thorough understanding of the idea generation phase, it you really want to take your moodboards to the next level you could think about including more images from related films rather than having the majority of them as art. You have effectively communicated why this project should be made one thing you could include more of is related media to show just how popular Sci-Fi films are at the moment. You have fluently communicated why you are the person that should make this project and clearly understand the importance of being interested in the project. You have a competent understanding of how to create a target audience profile next time try to include sections like related content, hobbies, and culture. You have effectively communicated who you target audience is however, I do feel your age range is more 12-21 rather than 16-25. You have communicated fluently what your requirements are for this project. I couldn’t see a schedule or any storyboards/concept art in your proposal make sure you are including everything that is required. Throughout your proposal there are a few missing capitals so make sure your read through to double check your SPAG before submitting work. Your blog is well labelled and the theme of your proposal is suitable for your film so good job! Overall your good job, make sure you include those extra bits and then you could push to get a higher grade!
— Feedback by George.
Well done with your proposal Alex. Your logline is excellent! Your synopsis is good, you have shown that you can effectively communicate your idea, I did get a little confused as I got the sense it was set inside the creature with all the bones but then Marco sees an eye so it might be worth having another think about how you can make this clearer. Your moodboards show a thorough understanding of the idea generation phase, it you really want to take your moodboards to the next level you could think about including more images from related films rather than having the majority of them as art. You have effectively communicated why this project should be made one thing you could include more of is related media to show just how popular Sci-Fi films are at the moment. You have fluently communicated why you are the person that should make this project and clearly understand the importance of being interested in the project. You have a competent understanding of how to create a target audience profile next time try to include sections like related content, hobbies, and culture. You have effectively communicated who you target audience is however, I do feel your age range is more 12-21 rather than 16-25. You have communicated fluently what your requirements are for this project. I couldn’t see a schedule or any storyboards/concept art in your proposal make sure you are including everything that is required. Throughout your proposal there are a few missing capitals so make sure your read through to double check your SPAG before submitting work. Your blog is well labelled and the theme of your proposal is suitable for your film so good job! Overall your good job, make sure you include those extra bits and then you could push to get a higher grade!
— Feedback by George.